In professional appraisals like the Annual Performance Appraisal Report (APAR)
You cannot say "he is better" unless you provide a yardstick. Use these phrases: sample pen picture of officers better
Typical Dialogue Snippet: "Tell me everything you remember. No detail is too small." (soft, insistent) unlike peers who [typical failure]
Many pen pictures fall into the trap of being "obituary style" writing—dry, chronological lists of assignments that fail to tell the reader who the person actually is. [Last Name] [unique success action]
During [high-stakes event], unlike peers who [typical failure], [Last Name] [unique success action], achieving [measurable outcome]—the [best / fastest / only] of [number] participants.
A dynamic, results-driven officer with exceptional analytical ability and moral courage. Possesses a strong presence and commands respect without intimidation.